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After:

Today’s visual notes show the power of feedback. Specifically from my Mom, Rochelle Cashdan, who is a writer and who also has an excellent visual sense. I am lucky to have someone who has sharp critical faculties who actually cares about me enough to give me detailed feedback.

Mom’s suggestions for improvement were reinforced by visualist extraordinaire, Roy Blumenthal. The main thing they both stressed: clarity.

What changed:

1) Changed the “I” to “You.” It’s not about me, or just me. I want you to be able to connect to this.
2) Got rid of “100 Days envizualized” and added “@” before “jonnygoldstein.” Might as well leverage this image to connect to more people on Twitter.
3) Redrew the “ASS” text to make the “ASS” more legible. That meant I had to change the angle of the leg.
4) Made all text more legible
5) Used bolder color
6) Highlighted selected words by adding white paint behind them

This image is part of 100 Days Envizualized, a project where I upload my visual notes that I create on 100 consecutive days. To check out the other notes, go here.

A book will be available of all 100 days worth of notes, with annotation, once the 100 days are over.

Keep checking back for new visual notes, every day (except weekends and holidays—in those cases I post them once the workweek starts). Until then, keep it visual!

P.S. The images themselves are inspired by Kathy Sierra’s credo of helping her customers kick ass.